Questions or comment so far?

Video Games, Dart Guns, and Energy Drinks.
So what do you guys thing? This site shows me the views so I know some one has read part of my story. Is it any good? Should I add anything? Do you like the title? Should I get rid of boring details? How is the grammar? Am I writing the conversations right?

Let me know and I Will fix it.

Also check in every once and a while. Ill link a new chapter(or part) on Facebook every time I write one. My goal is to at least do two a week to practice or get better, or faster or get to an actual point.

Thanks everyone.